A friend recently sent me this sentence:
The clients home we worked on was very pleased and called me later to make sure I understood that she was thrilled.
The home was very pleased, and called to say so? I love it! This is a perfect example of poor sentence structure. It exemplifies poor syntax–that is, the relationships between words and phrases are anything but harmonious.
This wonderful sentence also shows what can happen when the writer is in a hurry and her mind is not clear. Had she taken a deep breath or two before composing this message, or simply read it before sending it, it probably would have read something like this:
The client was very pleased. She called specifically to tell me that she was thrilled with the work we did on her home.
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