Conjunction Interruptus

This sentence has been twisting my mind around for days:

He’s likely to get as many if not more than she is.

As many as and more than are subordinating conjunctions that make comparisons. But in the sentence above, the writer truncated the first comparison by omitting the final essential word as:

To fix it, try this:

He’s likely to get as many as, if not more than, she is.

Another way to do this is to add the missing information and use only one subordinating conjunction:

He’s likely to get as many votes as she is, if not more.

Questions? Comments?

Cheers,

Tara Treasurefield
Tara’s Writing Studio

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2 Responses to Conjunction Interruptus

  1. Georg says:

    I especially like the last version, it is definitely the clearest. There is something to be said for limiting the number of subordinating conjunctions, I guess.

  2. 123clear says:

    I agree, George.

    This is both a case of Conjunction Interruptus and Conjunction Overload.

    Cheers,
    Tara

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