Number Contest

Here’s the second of the two contests I promised yesterday. This one centers on number.

Do you see the problem with the sentence below, and do you have a solution? If so, let me know. I’ll post the winner’s name and other information in this blog.

[In his office], there was a fax machine, two four-drawer file cabinets, and an old tangerine-colored iMac.

Cheers,

Tara Treasurefield
Tara’s Writing Studio

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One Response to Number Contest

  1. I would change it to the following: In his office, there were a fax machine, two four-drawer file cabinets, and an old tangerine-colored Mac.

    Perhaps this sentence could use a comma between old and tangerine, but I don’t see how that would clarify or simplify much. I changed iMac to Mac because in the Mac world, Macs are already older than iMacs.

    So…am I right? wrong? totally off the mark? too inquisitive about my own silly answer?

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