Monthly Archives: November 2007

Avoid Repetition

Avoid repetition, as in the following excerpt from a mystery novel: She ran to the large library, which was all tan stone, modern sloping roofs, and slipped inside. She exhaled in relief the moment she stepped inside…The library was large … Continue reading

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Sentence Structure/Bad Example

A friend recently sent me this sentence: The clients home we worked on was very pleased and called me later to make sure I understood that she was thrilled. The home was very pleased, and called to say so? I … Continue reading

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